T1+Writing


 * __Tuesday 5th April 2011 - Friday 8th April 2011. __**

__**WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty. **__


 * Success Criteria **
 * My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion **
 * I will state and restate my opinion **
 * I use a range of language resources and punctuation **
 * My paragraphs follow the S E E structure **

Do you want an amazing experience of New Zealand? Well if you do you need to come to the Bay of Plenty. In the Bay of plenty there are many different things to do and see. You pay a good price for what you do and everything is fun. There are a big range of things to do in the Bay of plenty so I recommend you come here to have a huge experience of a lifetime. My reasons for this are the beautiful beaches, the amazing Nature parks, Te Puia and Kiwi360.

My first reason for you coming to the BOP is because there are amazing beaches that are clean and enjoyable. The water is amazing and refreshable. All ages will love it in the water and playing on the sand. There are so many things that you can do at the beach, you could have a picnic or something like that.

My next reason for coming to the BOP is because the nature in the Bay of plenty is beautiful. You can go on lots of different bush walks and tours. One of the things that you have to do is walk up or around Mount Maunganui which is a very popular walk. You will enjoy listening to the sound of nature and learning lots of different things about how amazing BOP nature is. Even little kids will enjoy the walks.

Another thing to do is discover the BOP hot mud pools and guysers. It is an amazing thing to do for all ages. If you don't do this you will miss out on a whole new experience of the BOP. The mud pools are really cool and have lots of information about New Zealand. They are a very interesting thing to go and see and if you don't go to Te Puia you will regret it and miss out on a whole lot of the BOP culture.

My last idea is going to the wonderful Kiwi360. Kiwi 360 is one of BOP most popular places where you can have loads of fun. All ages will enjoy being at Kiwi 360 and enjoy all of the activities. You can go on tours through the Kiwifruit process and learn lots of new things. You will enjoy every single part of being at Kiwi360. A day at Kiwi360 will blow you away!

I think that you should go to these places to have a wonderful experience of the BOP. If you don’t you will regret it. These places are all amazing and all ages will enjoy them, so if you want to have an amazing experience of New Zealand I recommend you come to the BOP.

﻿Chontelle you have some very good reasons for visiting the Bay of Plenty, well done. You show a lot of promise with your writing. You are linking your paragraphs up, which is fantastic. Don't forget to restate you ideas in your conclusion and emphasis your main point of visiting the Bay of Plenty again! Excellent rhetorical question used but you could maybe use some more in your writing!! Your paragraphs are detailed but they need stronger imperatives to really convince me! Overall a very good effort. Miss Crone :)